Sonnet 29 commentary

In my response to “Sonnet 29″ I mentioned how the imagery and structure helped to make the poem sad. I used the structure PEEL (point, example, explain, link back to the question) but my explanation tended to be too long; therefore I wasted a lot of time. After reading Mr. McKnight’s commentary I realized that nearly every sentence contains a point and is relevant in some way or another. I then looked at the marking scheme and it states that I need to do this. So something I can do to improve my writing is to stick to the point and not go off track because I do not get any extra marks according to how good its written, if its got no relevance to the poem.

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7 comments to Sonnet 29 commentary

  • Averil

    I think that time is an issue, and so is sticking to relavant points. I’ve got a big problem with staying on track and writing things worth marks too. I never seem to be able to write with the PEEL structure though. Just never seems to come out right.

  • David

    I think it is hard to work with PEEL in essays. I find that a good essay comes out when the information is fully synthesised. I find that if the information is not synthesised then my assertion just becomes a clear fact.

  • Callam

    PEEL helps me structure my paragraphs and helps me not go off topic.

  • John

    I think Callam’s structure of PEEL can be very useful while writing essays. If you remember that while making your point you should be sure to make it an assertion then the PEEL structure can actually keep you very focused on the question.

  • Callam

    great minds think alike :)

  • Brandon

    I agree that PEEL structure can help organize your ideas to keep the question more focused, however don’t you think it’s harder to apply it to IB level commentaries? or is it not? I’m kinda confused…

  • Callam

    why would it be harder? we are advised to use the same structure in history when writing our essays. It would make no difference, it would actually be more relevant since were not experienced writers of commentaries and it would make sure we dont go off track

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